Tips for Narrative Writers 5 of 10
Passive sentences are sometimes used by students in their essays in an attempt to vary their sentence structure. However, this can often lead to rather confusing sentences where it is unclear what is actually happening in the statement. Therefore, especially for younger writers, students should strive to simplify their statements by using active and direct constructions.
Avoid: The bag was stolen by the robber who was chased by the lady.
Instead, consider: The lady chased the robber who stole her bag.
This way, there is less ambiguity about the actions being done and to whom the actions were done to.
Try changing these sentences to active ones: (the answers can be found in the 'Questions to Consider' section)
1. The ice-cream was eaten by the monster 2. Many games were played by the girls, and many prizes were won by them.
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