Subject: Replay + Questions! Your POV Character Describes Another Character [Group Call #2] 🎉

Replay + Questions!

Your POV Character Describes Another Character

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Hi Friend,

Here's the replay link for our call last night on "Your POV Character Describes Another Character."

Topic for Next Time: Questions for You

What shall we focus on for our next call? 

I forgot to ask last night. :)

Here are some of my ideas. Let me know what speaks to you. Thanks! 

Or if you have another question/idea, let me know and I can put that first.

I'll choose something from this list, unless you write me with your idea.

Ideas:
  • more on POV... what specifically? What are you questions here?
  • more on getting clear on your POV's character's voice in the story: tone, mood, attitude, etc. What questions do you have here too?
  • brainstorming processes on difficult decisions indoor book; like what? what would you like to see us discuss and have me open my brain to how I do it? ;D
  • grammar: specifically the "as" construction: Susan jumped as she slipped on her coat. (A blatantly incorrect example, but I see issues with this kind of false simultaneous action all the time.)
  • grammar: using an -ing word as the first word of a sentence; while not incorrect, this construction can obscure the doer -- the one doing the action.
  • grammar: why it's weak to start a sentence with an -ing phrase: Moving across the country, she found the perfect house. (This sentence is not incorrect, but I see other examples that mess this kind of sentence up.)

LINE EDITING FOR FICTION WRITERS 
Learning Lab

NEW SERVICE FOR YOU!

I had intended to run monthly webinars on this topic, focusing on your needs, but that is proving challenging to schedule with my other commitments. 

Instead I’d like to do an extra 20-30 minute live edit of your work, recorded. Each of you individually. I can do 1 per person in 2022, and ideally 2 sessions.

A Learning Lab, where we experiment, play, and learn together.

Benefits to you:
  • extra 1-1 support
  • targeted help on a specific topic
  • feedback tailored to you
  • (optional) marketing for you -- Optionally, and only if you agree, I’d like to use this recording as a demo for my marketing. You would be helping me spread the word about what we do in the group program.
You can be there live or not. That could be interesting.

As you can see this service is evolving, as I want it to work for me and for you. So, please ask for what you need and want, so we can make this service a win-win.

Focus: Let's focus on one line editing issue, like dialogue punctuation; POV in character descriptions, or setting; deep point of view issues; character voice at the start of a scene. (These are just examples. Your choice could be something else entirely.)
Time: 30-minutes max
Where: on Zoom
When: I'd like to start recording these in April, so if you're ready to schedule a time slot, please email me.

I have reserved Tuesday and Wednesday afternoons (evenings East coast time) for this client work: 2pm, 3pm, 4pm PT / 5pm, 6pm, 7pm ET.

You can schedule now, and decide on the topic later. Or you can schedule later. I'll be reminding you about this offer all year long :)

Just hit reply with your preferred date and time, and offer 1 or 2 back-up time slots. Or write me later with the same info.

You're helping me too! 

By the end of this year, I hope to have a better and clearer understanding of line edit needs of fiction writers, and be able to create or have already created some useful instructional material. 

So thank you for being willing to experiment, play, and learn along with me.

Process for our Learning Lab on Line Editing for Fiction Writers 
  1. Schedule your Learning Lab call.
  2. Ahead of our call, you send me 100-200 words of your manuscript in your problem area and define the problem as best you can. 
  3. I'll review the material ahead of time to get clear on the issue with you, and I may prepare some teaching material ahead of time to review with you on the Learning Lab call. 
  4. Then we'll get together on Zoom. 
  5. Check in, say hi. 
  6. Then with your consent, I'll hit "record" and we'll go over your material and I'll do some teaching and editing. Optional: If you consent for our call to be broadcast, I'll edit it for the public and share it with you ahead of time, so you can see what I'm doing. 
  7. During the call, you can ask questions and share.
  8.  On or before the 30-minute mark, we'll wrap up and end the Learning Lab call.
Any questions? Or requests for clarification? 

Please let me know.

Best,
Beth
Barany Productions, 771 Kingston Ave., #108, 94611, Piedmont, United States
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